TEXT B For admissions officers,
reviewing applications is like final-exam week for students except it lasts for
months. Great applications tell us we’ve done our job well, by attracting
top-caliber students. But it’s challenging to maintain the frenetic pace without
forgetting these are all real people with real aspirations--people whose life
stories we are here to unravel, if they will let us. The essay
is a key piece of learning those life stories. I live near Los Angeles, where
every day screenplays are read without regard for human context. The writer’s
life and dreams don’t matter--all that matters is the writing, the ideas, the
end product. On the other hand, in reading essays, context does matter: who
wrote this We are driven to put the jigsaw puzzle together because we think we
are building a community, not just choosing neat stories. When I pick up a file,
I want to know whether the student has sib lings or not, who his parents are,
where he went to high school. Then I want the essay to help the rest of the
application make sense, to humanize all the numbers that flow past. I am looking
for insight. A brilliantly written essay may compel me to look
beyond superficial shortcomings in an application. But if no recommendation or
grade or test score hints at such writing talent, I may succumb to cynicism and
assume the writer had help--maybe too much. In the worst cases, I may find that
I have read it be fore--with name and place changed--on the Internet, in an
essay-editing service or a "best essays" book. The most
appealing essays take the opportunity to show a voice not rendered homogeneous
and pasteurized. But sometimes the essays tell us too much. Pomona offers this
instruction with one essay option: "We realize that not everything done in life
is about getting into college. Tell us about something you did that was just
plain fun. "One student grimly reported that nothing was fun because in his
family everything was about getting into college. Every activity, course choice
and spare moment. It did spark our sympathy, but it almost led to a call to
Child Protective Services as well. Perfection isn’t required. We
have seen phenomenal errors in essays that haven’t damaged a student at all. I
recall a student who wrote of the July 1969 lunar landing of-I kid you
not--Louis Armstrong. I read on, shaking my head. This student was great--a jazz
trumpeter who longed to study astronomy. It was a classic slip and perhaps a
hurried merging of two personal heroes. He was offered admission, graduated and
went on for a PhD in astrophysics. He may not have been as memorable if he had
named "Neil" instead of "Louis" in his essay’s opening line. Hey, we’re human,
too. An essay that is rough around the edges may still be
compelling. Good ideas make an impression, even when expressed with bad
punctuation and spelling errors. Energy and excitement can be communicated. I’m
not suggesting the "I came, I saw, I conquered" approach to essay writing, nor
the "I saved the world" angle taken by some students who write about community
service projects. I’m talking about smaller moments that are well captured.
Essays don’t require the life tragedy that so many seem to think is necessary.
Not all admission offers come out of sympathy! Admissions
officers, even at the most selective institutions, really aren’t looking for
perfection in 17 and 18-year-olds. We are looking for the human being behind the
roster of activities and grades. We are looking for those who can let down their
guard just a bit to allow others in We are looking for people whose egos won’t
get in the way of learning, students whose investment in ideas and words tells
us in the context of their records--that they are aware of a world beyond their
own homes, schools, grades and scores. A picture, they say, is worth a thousand
words. To us, an essay that reveals a student’s unaltered voice is worth much,
much more. The main idea of the passage is ______.
A.how to write a good essay in the application for college. B.how to show the person behind the test scores and grades. C.how to tell one’s life stories in the application for college. D.how to outdo others in essay writing of the application.