This report makes some recommendations for a company
planning to buy new computers. It is well organised, concise and relevant. But
it contains several mistakes in grammar and spelling which are underlined.
Correct the mistakes. To: Said Kamal
Re: New computers The aim of this report is presenting
(to present) the best 2 choose
for the company in replacing its computers in the central administration
offices. Following some 3 initially research, we narrowed the field down to three
possibilities: The first, DX590, is the
4 more expensive of the three,
5 with a cost of $590 per unit. However, it is the
most 6 powerfull and adaptable.
The second, the HS Venturer, is a little cheaper to purchase, at $555, but has a
smaller hard disk capacity and a slower processor. The third, the Songsing
AF100, is 7 the bargain at $480
and has similar specifications to the HS Venturer. However, Songsing is a
relatively new company and thus it is difficult 8
getting references for the product. 9 The another very important
factor is the after-sales package. 10 Every three companies offer between 1 and 3-year service 11 garantees, but on slightly different
terms and at different prices. The best of these is the DX590’s two-year
warranty, 12 that is an on-site
24-hour repair service. In conclusion, we recommend 13 to purchase the DX590. The HS Venturer
offers much less for a similar price, while the Songsing AF100 is probably too
risky, because it has 14 any
track record. With good service back-up, the DX590 15
can also prove to be the most economical 16 on the long run.